Journal 2-Analytic

"It was a spring afternoon in West Florida.  Janie had spent most of the day under a blossoming pear tree in the back-yard.  She had been spending every minute that she could steal from her chores under that tree for the last three days.  That was to say, ever since the first tiny bloom had opened.  It had called her to come and gaze on a mystery.  From barren brown stems to glistening leaf-buds; from the leaf-buds to snowy virginity of bloom.  It stirred her tremendously.  How?  Why?  It was like a flute song forgotten in another existence and remembered again.  What?  How?  Why?  This singing she heard that had nothing to do with her ears.  The rose of the world was breathing out smell.  It followed her through all her waking moments and caressed her in her sleep.  It connected itself with other vaguely felt matters that had struck her outside observation and buried themselves in her flesh.  Now they emerged and quested about her consciousness."

Decisions are highlighted, bolded, etc.

•  Many words related to blooming
•  Several other "b" sounds
•  Decision to write short, quick questions
•  More vague words, like on page 1
•  Personification of the tree
•  words about touch, action, etc. 
•  Decision to add a lot of setting details
•  bringing in the motif of time
•  gentle tone
•  description of senses
•  Fairly short, descriptive sentences
•  Calm rhythm
•  Lots of figurative language
•  Describes remembering and forgetting again, like on page 1
•  Lots of descriptive verbs (struck, emerged, quested)
•  In the middle of the paragraph, lots of "f" sounds